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How should we ensure that television is a positive influence in the life of children?

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Nowadays, the life is
hustler
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a hustler
 and
bustler
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Bustler
bustle
buster
 so
television
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 become to play an important role in entertainment. Unexceptionally, parents and their children spend a
lot
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 of time watching
television
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 in order to entertain and get new information.
However
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, some people suggest that watching
television
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 has a positive effect to viewer in
directly
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directing
,
expecially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
 children and vice versa.
First
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 of all, children may
develope
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
 a creative
imagination though
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imagination, though
 lively image, music and cartoon on the
television
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. Since the
chanels
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
chance
channel
charnels
 for children are
desinged
done or made or performed with purpose and intent
designed
 with the appropriate content and the
funy
arousing or provoking laughter
funny
funky
 tune, they can be easy to enjoy it.
For instance
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, when a child watch the cartoon on the
television
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, that he or she see some objects which are designed with vivid
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
colours
 and nice shape by chance stimulates his or her creativity.
Secondly
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, on the
television
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 has a
lot
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 of
chanels
official routes of communication
channels
canals
canoes
 which help children learn more about
environment
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the environment
, animals, plant and even other languages. It is clear that
television
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 sums up a
lot
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 of knowledge around our life.
Hence
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, they just observe that things thanks
to
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for
 watching
television
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 without going outside and contacting in direct. .
However
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, it does not ensure that children may be attacked by some violent or sex images, some
chanels
official routes of communication
channels
canoes
chains
 which are not suitable for the age of children.
Moreover
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, in case some people try to create some things in order to attract their attention on their
chanel
a path over which electrical signals can pass
channel
channels
canal
 which contain unsuitable information.
Besides
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, if children spend a
lot
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 of their time watching
television
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, it can affect to their eyesight and they may become passive. In conclusion,
television
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 may influence on children in both
side
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sides
.
Thus
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, parents and schools need to take a control about the program on the
television
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 which are appropriate for children.

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Stick to this essay structure:

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  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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