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Some people believe that a crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person's nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The reasons behind
crime
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 has been a heated topic of debate in the today's world. People hold different views, whether
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the crime
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 of social problems and
poverty
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 or due to people's bad characteristics. From my standpoint,
crime
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 is consequence of social problems and shortage. On the one hand, there are a few reasons why crimes depend on people's nature. The
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 one is that, there are two choices in front of people, whether work hard for a salary or earns much money easily from robbery or shoplifting. Due to their laziness, people would not work to earn a living and they would find another way which is illegal.
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, it is in my belief that the rest of people are grown without parents and their upbringing and those people are more likely to be offenders of crimes because they do not differ black and white.
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, they would lead to mistakes
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 as turn to
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. Regardless of the above mentioned explanations, I would argue that social problems and
poverty
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 is the main fact to commit in
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 significantly.The
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 and conceivably the most obvious reason is that unemployment rate plays am an essential role in committing crimes because most of the criminals are unemployed and they would do offences.
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Secondly as
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Secondly, as
 we know, a significant number of people are below
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.Due to earning less money, they commit to
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 for the better life. In conclusion, based on the aforementioned explanations, I consider that social problems and
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 are the most result of
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the crime
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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