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Since Most Information About History And Culture Is Found On The Internet, Museums Are Not Needed Anymore

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It is irrefutable that nowadays, because of technology, arm -chair tourism through which we can see historical objects and works of
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 on a
computer
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, has gained popularity.
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, I disagree, that public museums and
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 galleries will no longer be needed. In fact, I believe that their popularity will grow even
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. 
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 of all, computers can never replace real public museums and
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 galleries. No matter how real and vivid
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 images are, they are only images and can never  be likened to the historical objects and works of
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 that we see in real or even might be allowed to touch with our fingertips. The difference can be compared to seeing the picture of a mango rather than actually eating it. 
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, visiting real museums and
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 galleries is a rewarding experience in many respects. For one thing, it is a good exercise. While we are making the trip to a museum or
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 ga
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gallery, and
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 strolling about on site, we ge
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come into the possession of something concrete or abstract
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ome exercise which does a lot of good to our health. We generally go with family and friends and enjoy a lot. We
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 learn about the culture and tradition of the place. All
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 broadens our horizons which can never be done by the passive activity of seeing something on the
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 screen. 
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, I believe that after seeing these objects and museums, our craving to actually see these increases even more and so we make efforts to go and see these places.
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 can be proved by the overwhelming number of tourists to these places that has been increasing year after year. At certain times, especially when it is temporarily impossible for us to visit museums and
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 galleries in person, we can get a rough picture of what ar
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, what we see from a
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 screen is, after all, not exactly the same as what we see and feel with our own eyes on si
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the site

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