Nowadays parents are forcing their word to do part time jods in their free time. Write advantage and disadvantages of this phenomenon

From the beginning of twenty
first
century, parents are emphasis their children to
enroll
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enrol
enrolled
in a part
time
jods
the principal activity in your life that you do to earn money
jobs
gods
goods
in
there
of them or themselves
their
leisure
time
in
order
to make their
life
more convenient and independent. There are
lot
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lots
of merits of
this
phenomenon at the same
time
their
in or at that place
there
are some disadvantages too.
This
essay will discuss all the pros and Cros of
this
phenomenon. There are numerous
amount
of advantages of doing part
time
jods
the principal activity in your life that you do to earn money
jobs
by
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with
children.
First
and foremost, party
jods
any supernatural being worshipped as controlling some part of the world or some aspect of life or who is the personification of a force
gods
goods
guides
will help children to understand and experience the effects which is made by their parents in
order
to earn good
amount
of reimbursement. They might learn the importance of
money
form
a giver or sender
from
their childhood which may help them to be a successful person in
futher
to or at a greater extent or degree or a more advanced stage ('further' is used more often than 'farther' in this abstract sense)
further
life
. Apart from
this
, by earning small amounts they can be independent and can improve their
life
by
spend
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spending
that
money
on their well-being At
last
, they might reduce the burden of family members related to financial budget.
On the other hand
, we
can not
can not
cannot
ignore the adverse effect of
this
parallel development
on
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of
in
children. As already they have
tackle
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tackled
with different kind of subjects and after learning
this
subject in the school they get little period of
time
to get fresh and rejuvenate and if students will use
this
leisure
time
in
order
to
persue
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
jods
having desirable or positive qualities especially those suitable for a thing specified
goods
gods
jobs
there is a
fare
a traveling show; having sideshows and rides and games of skill etc.
fair
amount
of chances that they will experience mental as well physical concern. At the same
time
, they might create an interest of earning more
money
by skipping lecture in schools in
order
to earn more
money
.
This
will definitely ruin the academic career of
student
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the student
students
a student
. As children
are not enough mature
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do not enough mature
does not enough mature
to manage the
money
. They may spend
this
money
in some anti-social activities
such
as smoking, drinking
(
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(
alchohol
a liquor or brew containing alcohol as the active agent
alcohol
)
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)
products and so on
.
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.
Therefore we
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Therefore, we
can say that children might lose their
life
and academic career by doing part
time
jods
the principal activity in your life that you do to earn money
jobs
To recapitulate, in
this
contemporary
era it
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era, it
is quite mandatory for
adults
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adult
children to earn some
amount
of reimbursement in
order
to reduce the burden
of
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on
their families. While parents should ask their children where they are spending the
money
with the view to avoid some uncertainty.
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