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Nowadays parents are forcing their word to do part time jods in their free time. Write advantage and disadvantages of this phenomenon

#parents #word #part #time #jods #advantage #phenomenon
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From the beginning of twenty
first
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 century, parents are emphasis their children to
enroll
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enrol
enrolled
 in a part
time
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jods
the principal activity in your life that you do to earn money
jobs
gods
goods
 in
there
of them or themselves
their
 leisure
time
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 in
order
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 to make their
life
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 more convenient and independent. There are
lot
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lots
 of merits of
this
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 phenomenon at the same
time
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their
in or at that place
there
 are some disadvantages too.
This
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 essay will discuss all the pros and Cros of
this
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 phenomenon. There are numerous
amount
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 of advantages of doing part
time
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jods
the principal activity in your life that you do to earn money
jobs
by
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with
 children.
First
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 and foremost, party
jods
any supernatural being worshipped as controlling some part of the world or some aspect of life or who is the personification of a force
gods
goods
guides
 will help children to understand and experience the effects which is made by their parents in
order
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 to earn good
amount
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 of reimbursement. They might learn the importance of
money
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form
a giver or sender
from
 their childhood which may help them to be a successful person in
futher
to or at a greater extent or degree or a more advanced stage ('further' is used more often than 'farther' in this abstract sense)
further
life
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. Apart from
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, by earning small amounts they can be independent and can improve their
life
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 by
spend
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spending
 that
money
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 on their well-being At
last
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, they might reduce the burden of family members related to financial budget.
On the other hand
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, we
can not
can not
cannot
 ignore the adverse effect of
this
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 parallel development
on
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of
in
 children. As already they have
tackle
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tackled
 with different kind of subjects and after learning
this
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 subject in the school they get little period of
time
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 to get fresh and rejuvenate and if students will use
this
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 leisure
time
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 in
order
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 to
persue
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
jods
having desirable or positive qualities especially those suitable for a thing specified
goods
gods
jobs
 there is a
fare
a traveling show; having sideshows and rides and games of skill etc.
fair
amount
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 of chances that they will experience mental as well physical concern. At the same
time
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, they might create an interest of earning more
money
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 by skipping lecture in schools in
order
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 to earn more
money
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.
This
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 will definitely ruin the academic career of
student
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the student
students
a student
. As children
are not enough mature
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do not enough mature
does not enough mature
 to manage the
money
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. They may spend
this
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money
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 in some anti-social activities
such
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 as smoking, drinking
(
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(
alchohol
a liquor or brew containing alcohol as the active agent
alcohol
)
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)
 products and so on
.
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.
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Therefore we
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Therefore, we
 can say that children might lose their
life
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 and academic career by doing part
time
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jods
the principal activity in your life that you do to earn money
jobs
 To recapitulate, in
this
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 contemporary
era it
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era, it
 is quite mandatory for
adults
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adult
 children to earn some
amount
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 of reimbursement in
order
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 to reduce the burden
of
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on
 their families. While parents should ask their children where they are spending the
money
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 with the view to avoid some uncertainty.
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