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An increasing number of people are now using the internet to meet new people and socialise. Some people think this has brought people closer together while others think people are becoming more isolated. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

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-------------------------------------- People have different views about the correlation between the influence of the
internet
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 on
society
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 and the use of the
internet
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 in people's daily
life
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. While there are some good arguments in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of the
internet
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 to be beneficial, I believe that it is better to balance between using the
internet
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 and interact with
society
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. On the one hand, the use of the
internet
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 helps people widen their relationship. They can get in touch with many new friends all around the world. People and their friends on the
internet
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 not only share their
life
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stories but
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stories, but
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 improve their knowledge
on
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of
 other fields,
such
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 as English, cultures, histories and so on.
Besides
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, others are able to meet their new clients and partners who
are interesting
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are interested
 in their
companies's
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companies'
 products, which results in their cooperation in business and contribution for
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.
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, many people
also
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 find their real love when using the
internet
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, they will have a blind date
togerther
in contact with each other or in proximity
together
 and have a period of
memorable
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a memorable time
time
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 in love, someone
occasionally move
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occasionally moves
 towards to get married. At
this
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 point, the more
time
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 people use the
internet
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, the closer people are becoming and the more relationship they will have.
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,
this
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 situation is supporting people's developments.
On the other hand
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, people's daily
life
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 has been affected tremendously by the
internet
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 accesses. A survey conducted by Harvard University in 2016 showed that the average hours people on a vacation were five times shorter now than 10 years ago, the amount of
time
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 they stayed at home and used the
internet
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 on their cell phone or laptop increased by 250 percent.
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, people spend more
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 being sedentary at one place, which makes them get more health problems,
such
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 as obesity, depression and autism, and limits them to interact with their family and friends. Examples like
this
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 obviously show the disadvantages that can derive from using the
internet
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. In summary, the
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 has great impacts on people's daily
life
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, though exact impacts are not conclusive. For the reasons mentioned above, I believe that while the proliferation of the
internet
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 allows people to enlarge their own world, it has locked them in a struggle to communicate with
society
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. It is recommended that people should spend more
time
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 interacting with
community
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the community
 and using the
internet
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 side by side. Reply
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