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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People show contrary arguments with regard to the best way of judging offences. While a group of people accepts that setting a fixed penalty for each type of
crime
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 would strengthen the governmental justice
system
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, I totally agree with others who believe that the circumstances of each
crime
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 and motives standing behind each felony should be carefully evaluated in order to produce a fair
punishment
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. On the
one
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 hand, there are relevant reasons why many individual persons support the idea of fixed
punishment
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 for each category of criminal activity.
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 key reason is that
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 sort of justice
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 acts as a deterrent for many criminals, as they would realize that there is a swift and strict sentence for serious offences.
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, an international survey has demonstrated that the rate of crimes has been greatly reduced in certain countries after adopting fixed harsh punitive systems for each sort of
crime
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. Another point, Fixed
punishment
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 will probably save not only much time, but
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 an enormous amount of money that could be allocated to other vital public services
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 as health and education
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, if the circumstance of individual crimes or motivation for committing
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 actions needs to be considered, the government has to spend nation budget for different sections,
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 as payments for lawyers and police security. Despite the above argument, I totally approve with the other group who agree that the fixed
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system
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 seems to be rather unfair, and
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 lawyers should investigate the conditions of individual crimes as well as the motivational factors leading to serious actions. It is possible for two people who committed crimes to have entirely different motives.
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,
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 person has killed someone
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 of
self-defence reaction
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the self-defence reaction
, while the other
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 has done the same
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 because to steal an immense amount of money effortless.
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, it would be biased decision to set
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 strict
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 for these two individuals.
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, there are several people who are mentally ill, so when they commit an offence they would be judged
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,
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 of being grouped into the same category of all the other type of murders.
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, evaluating the whole situation and the factors leading to crimes ensure the existence of the sense of humanity within the justice
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.
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, felons who committed criminal activity in order to get money so as to be able to satisfy their survival basics need, should not be sentenced as those who committed
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 offences in order to gain too much profit. In conclusion, while some people assure that fixed
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 could be beneficial for some good reasons, I believe with others its disadvantages far outweigh its benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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