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Climate change is an issue. Do you agree with this?

#climate #change
I think it is especially important for a child to spend quality
time
 with his
/
her parents in his
/
her early ages. Because if a child doesn't spend enough
time
 with his
/
her parents in his
/
her early ages, and her
/
his parents don't care about her
/
him, s
/
he may have a psychological disorder,
such
 as anxiety, later in life. I think the relationship between parents and children has been changed recently. I think the relationship between them got loose because parents generally works till late hours, and children are in schools all day, and the evening they just want to spend
time
 with the
internet
. I think the most popular free-
time
 activities among children should be playing computers or spending
time
 with social media. I think they especially like spending
time
 on the
internet
 because the things that they can find on the
internet
 attract them a lot. When we were children, we mostly used to spend our free times playing outside, but now it is hard to see children playing outside. More and more children are getting attached to the
internet
, and I think in the near future, almost all children will spend their free
time
 being online.

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