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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

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Migration of skilled people and students to metro cities is drastically increase over a
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 decade. For some people, it is a concern that may create so many problems. Problems and possible solutions at administration and individual level are discussed in the following paragraph. There are ample problems due to population rising in the cities.
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, many people shifting towards to the urban areas which means they are using more public and private transit. It leads to more traffic jam and pollution in the air. Which ultimately disturb the ecological cycle.
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, due to population increases, people need space for accommodation.
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 may compel the government to build infrastructure which affects the economy of the nation. There are some solutions possible at government and individual level, which may tackle
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 problem in a better way.
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 of all, government should encourage public to use public transportation by offering some perks and discounts.
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, establish the better traffic management system and heavy fines for who break the rules.
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, they should have to provide all basic facilities like healthcare, education, transportation and so on in the rural areas so people can certainly stop moving to the cities. At the individual side, we must have to use public transit facilities and car pooling to reduce traffic on the roads.
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, planting more trees to create the balance in the ecosystem. In conclusion, it is true that people are migrating towards the cities for the better quality of life, but the ministry and Individuals together reduce adverse effects on the environment by enforcing rules, increase frequency of public transportation, fulfilling the needs in the rural areas.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • strain on infrastructure
  • public services
  • overcrowded
  • inadequate healthcare services
  • pressure on educational institutions
  • environmental impact
  • increased pollution
  • waste management
  • destruction of green spaces
  • natural habitats
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