Many people think children should not be punished at early ages. To what extend do you agree or disagree? What sort of punishment may be applied for children?

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There are lots of arguments about whether youngsters should be

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penalized

or they should be taught without torture. Some say if they will be punished for some commitment, it will come across as a trauma in their life.

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, others, myself included, argue that without suffering lessons cannot be learnt effectively. In

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essay I will explain my idea and give some examples about what should be done as

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a discipline

. Having said that, children may commit any sort of crime which require some lessons to be taught. The reason behind the lesson that in their after life they will be punished for what they did and may suffer severely because of consequences

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as monetary penalty or imprisonment. Take almost every prisoner

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. If their childhood would be investigated, probably lack of family care might be understood, which is

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not to punished

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not to punishing

don't punish

them appropriately.

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, I strongly believe that penalizing children are extremely important since it may prevent them to pull off worse things in the future, not to mention possible price they will pay.

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, it is crucial that how to penalize them without

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trauma since there are lots of people who had suffered during childhood because of the parents’ trial.

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of all, the main goal should be the benefit of the young one and it should not be forgotten that they are not able to disguise which is good or bad.

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, they should learn their differences at some point.

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, as a trial, the most valuable thing might be taken away from them

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as the Internet, nowadays. Absence of very critical item would lead them to think what they have done and, in the future, when they remember that feeling, they would comprehend that something is going wrong. Another forfeiture might be cutting their pocket money off,

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. By doing that they,

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, would think about possible consequences of their behaviour. To conclude,

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youngsters may be taught as very naive to overcome any sanction, I totally believe that they should not be regarded as that way and should pay the prize of their doings by their pocket money or valuable things, which is mentioned above.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

367 words

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Many people think children should not be punished at early ages. To what extend do you agree or disagree? What sort of punishment may be applied for children?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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In many parts of the world, people now often throw things away when they are broken and buy new ones, whereas in the past broken things were repaired and used again. Why do you think this is the case? What problems may it lead to?

'People who do not use social media networks* will always fall behind in career development opportunities.' To what extent do you feel that this is an accurate and important prediction?