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Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, tell him which team won describe the conditions on the day say how you felt about the match

#friend #team #conditions #match
Dear Sam, How are you feeling now? By the way, I'm writing
this
 letter to give updates about
the
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last
 weekend match. Since you're away for the semi-final match, all our teammates are so perplexed about the match against our counter side.
Although
, its
toughest
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 match for every member of our party and everyone did a great job till the end. But, unfortunately in the
last
 over of the
game
, they scored
highest
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 runs. Due to that, they won the
game
.
Also
, I forgot to mention
about
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that day's weather, it's so windy and about to rain for the entire day. Our team made a splendid effort in order to beat the wind, but they
exhausted
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at
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 the end. Because of
this
high speed
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 wind,
team
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unable
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 to meet the target which was
initially
 set by our captain. For me, it's a nice
game
 to battle with
with
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opposite
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 side, I learnt some of the bowling techniques from the member of the opposite team. At once, I thought to apply immediately for the
next
game
. But I didn't have the chance to accommodate them. Overall the
game
 was a massive hit with the bustling crowd. Hope I, see you soon in the field with
the
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all powers to bat. Best regards Shareef

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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