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Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but other people think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen at TV and the internet. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, together with the development of many kinds of transportations
such
 as train or air plane, travelling around the world is so far
easy
situated in or facing or moving toward the east
east
. But some people
also
 argue that
this
 can be easily done by just sitting in front of the television. In my opinion, I prefer real experience by visiting many places
instead
 of watching these well-organised programs on TV or via the internet. Undoubtedly, there are many advantages of travelling abroad.
Firstly
, it would give people real experience and
provision
Suggestion
provide
 a good understanding of culture. Enjoyment and experience gained from these trips are distinct to each person.
For example
, some people might spend most of their time in visiting famous and beautiful places
such
 as world heritages while others like exploring the significant culture by reserving time for watching
potterer
a person who putters about
putterer
, doing agriculture or quietly seeing a crowded street in other countries.
Secondly
, they can directly eat many kinds of delicious foods, which have very different taste when
comparing
Suggestion
compared
 with the same foods made in their country.
Finally
, communicating with indigenous people would help
youngster
Suggestion
a youngster
 who
are doing
Suggestion
is doing
 the researches or studying new languages improve a lot.
On the other hand
, others believe that one can easily learn the traditions and cultural norms through different source of information
such
 as television or digital contents on the internet. The whole world can be explored by just simply clicking the computer mouse or pushing the TV remote. People possibly choose the favourite places or interesting programmes or skip the dislike information
instead
 of passing the different kinds of feeling like physical travelling. In conclusion, I
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 that physical travelling is a best method to have deep knowledge about the country we want to know.

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • interactions
  • virtual means
  • cultural nuances
  • language acquisition
  • problem-solving
  • adaptability
  • sustainability
  • virtual tours
  • documentaries
  • sophisticated
  • realistic representations
  • comprehensive understanding
  • financial status
  • carbon footprint
  • digital resources
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