You are planning to take a vacation. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter •describe the vacation spot you have chosen •explain how you plan to spend your time there •invite your friend to join you on your vacation Begin your letter as follows: Dear….
Dear Jenny,
Hello. How are you? I hope you are doing well. If you want to ask me, I am great. I want to write to you because
,
I have a vacation plan.
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apply
Firstly
, I want to talk about my plan. I have been wanting to see new places for a long time. So, that is
why I am planning to go Italy
with you. I have chosen Change preposition
to Italy
this
spot because there are a lot of historical and natural beauties. We can stay in Portofino. You know, this
city is my favourite one. And
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Also
also
, I am waiting to receive a marriage proposal. So, from my perspective, this
city is amazing. Moreover
, we can see Coliseum, Panteon
, Trevi Correct your spelling
Pantheon
fountain
... Capitalize word
Fountain
Furthermore
, we can eat most
delicious pizza in the world.
Correct article usage
the most
Above all
, I want to go this
city Change preposition
to this
especially
with you. You are my best friend and I want to spend time with you. I hopeAdd the comma(s)
, especially
,
you will accept my offer. I promise you , we will have fun and Remove the comma
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also
collect many beautiful memories.
I am looking forward to your answer. Take care.
Love wishes,
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Coherence and Cohesion
You've chosen an engaging topic and structured your letter in a clear, logical manner, introducing your vacation plan attractively. To enhance your coherence, consider adding transitions between paragraphs for smoother flow.
Task Achievement
For an even better task achievement, providing more detailed plans or personal reasons for choosing the activities could add depth to your invitation, making it irresistible.
Greeting and Closing
Your greeting and closing are warmly written, setting a friendly tone that is perfect for a letter to a friend.
Single Idea per Paragraph
You have successfully communicated your excitement and the main ideas by focusing each paragraph on a single topic, making the letter enjoyable to read.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite