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Some people think that books are losing importance as a source of information and entertainment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #books #importance #source #information #entertainment
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It is argued that
books
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the books
 are worthlessness
source
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 of
information
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 and
entertainment
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. I
am partially agree
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partially agree
have partially agreed
 with
this
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 statement because books are still
main
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the main source
source
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 of
information
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, and
entertainment
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 for older people and losing
importance
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important
 for young adults.
To begin
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 with, books are the
first
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 priority for
older population
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the older population
older populations
an older population
.
Firstly
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, most of the old people have
habit
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a habit
the habit
 of reading books as
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information
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an information source
the information source
source
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.
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, they find it easy to read books over e-books because of their weak eyesight and many other problems
such
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 as internet connections. Apart from that, they do not like to go to clubs or discos for
entertainment
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 because of their health issues.
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, books are the most important elements in their life which are the
source
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 of
information
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 and
entertainment
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 as well.
On the other hand
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, young adults have no interest in books in
this
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 modern era. They prefer to use technology for various purposes
such
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 as to find any
information
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 and
also
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 as a
source
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 of
entertainment
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 like they can play games and watch movies. Recent research concluded that young generation finds books boring and according to their survey conducted in 2018, only 5% young population buying and reading books.
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, because of the advancement in technology makes them believe that printed books are not beneficial as
internet
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the internet
. In Conclusion, I personally believe that books still hold a special place in the older
generations
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generation's
 lives and it is losing its importance in young people as a
source
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 of
information
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 and
entertainment
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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