The table below gives information about the languages that high school students speak at home in one district

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The table illustrates the data about the languages which are used by secondary students in their houses in one US school district.

Overall

, Spanish is the most common language

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Nepalese shares the least. To describe the information in a few more

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in the first place, accounted for nearly 15,110 speakers in 2008. After that, from 2014, there was a significant rise in student numbers speaking

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language,with

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doubling.At the same time,Korean and Vietnamese were alike

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they were both reducing the number of students.

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Polish, Nepalese numbers increased dramatically to 438 and turned Polish to

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the

last

place in 2014.

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, Chinese and Arabic were simultaneously 4670 and 1320 people whilst Russian represented 1656 students.

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the fifth of the Spanish.

Fri Apr 24 2020

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

152 words

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The table below gives information about the languages that high school students speak at home in one district

Government investment in the visual arts, the kind you commonly see in art galleries, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Students in schools and universities learn more from their teachers than through other means such as the Internet, libraries, and TV. To what extent you agree or disagree?

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There seems to be increasing trend towards assessing students through exams rather tah than Continual assessments. What are advantages and disadvantage?

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?