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People aim to achieve the balance between their work and lives. But few people achieve it. What are the causes of the problem? How to overcome it?

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Professional and personal lives are both important for anyone. One should know how to
balance
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, it causes a
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 of chaos in the lives. Almost everyone aim to
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 them, but only few people can achieve it. It happens because of a
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 of reasons. In
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 modern world, everyone running with
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. Some employees
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 overtime some
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 whole week depends on their
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 and financial requirements. Working like
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 may give them more money or
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 satisfaction, but they are missing another important thing which is their personal lives. Every individual has personal lives, they should spend some
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 with their family, friends and do recreational stuff. Some people say personal
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 is more important than
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life
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, but in my opinion, both are really important, both can impact one another. Few people can successfully maintain
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a balance
 between those two and they will enjoy the awesomeness of the
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. A
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 of people are failing to maintain the
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. There are a
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 of reasons for that. Financial status is the one of the main reasons for their failure. People with low income try to earn more by working hard and overtime,
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final
 results spending less
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 with family.
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load
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 is another issue with employees working in a big position. There are few people who
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 in crucial positions in huge companies.
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Workload
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 on them will be very high, they have to
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 round the clock to run a company.
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 makes them to lose their personal
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. Everyone should follow a few steps to make
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 between
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 and
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. They should reduce
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load
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. There are a
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 disadvantages with heavy
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work loads
work that a person is expected to do in a specified time
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 so it is always better to share
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. People who are struggling with financial issues should try to
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 smart rather working hard.
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 makes them more successful and gives
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 to spend with their family. To conclude, there are a
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 reports telling failure of balancing between personal and professional lives harms even society. It is really important to
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 them so everyone can enjoy their lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Work-life balance: the equilibrium between one's job responsibilities and personal life.
  • Overwork: working too hard or for excessive amounts of time.
  • Remote work: working from a location other than the central work office, often from home.
  • Flexible working hours: work hours that are adaptable to suit an employee's needs.
  • Commuting: traveling between one's home and workplace.
  • Digital technology: electronic tools and systems used to generate, store, and process data, often leading to increased connectivity.
  • Disconnect: to detach from technology or work communications, often to establish boundaries.
  • Time management: the ability to use one's time effectively or productively.
  • Prioritize: to determine the order for dealing with tasks according to their importance.
  • Employer support: programs or practices employed by an organization to assist employees in managing work and personal roles.
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