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Reading is more educational than watching videos or TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 is argued by some that reading materials provide adequate information for education rather than seeing many video or TV shows
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 agree
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with
this
 statement as it helps to nurture the imagination power of an individual and allows to get more reliable content about a subject
To begin
 with
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although
 the video helps in learning by pictorial
represention
a presentation to the mind in the form of an idea or image
representation
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,
the actual stimulus
develop
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develops
 to catalyse the creative power in an individual formed through
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continuing in time or space without interruption
continuous
 reading
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so that
 it leads to imagination of that context in our mind.
For instance
, the
hardward
 university states that 90% of student have better skills after introducing strict library hours in the weekend than simply explaining the content using videos.
Hence
, it is proved that reading brings some direct effect in education than simply watching some videos.
Secondly
, more information can be accessed from reliable authors, in order submit many projects in school days.
For example
.
majority
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The majority
Majority
 of students in MA university are taking printed copies of different books like Wikipedia from the library to know
exact name
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the exact name
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,
date, time of
particular event
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a particular event
 for the future reference for their subject
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.
In addition
 to that
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,
 more focused knowledge
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that's
readly
without much difficulty
readily
 available for the individual.
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Therefore
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,
 it is evident that reading is more beneficial in many ways.
Nevertheless
, it may be argued by some that TV programmes help to create
easy understanding
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an easy understanding
 of the content
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however it
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however, it
 seems to be illogical to me as there is a chance
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to
 manipulate the data for channel rating. To conclude
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 despite the fact that videos are encouraged to bring the clarity of many
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phenomena
, l believe that it is partial learning without any brain work.
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If
 the school
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introduces
 new reading class with book festival
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 it allows the students to get familiar with many books.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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