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Some people say that E- books and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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The technology
has grown
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is growing
grew
 day by day and
also
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 has provided us many different ways for updating
by
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with
 different news. In spite of the fact that some people believe that traditional
newspaper
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 and magazines will be replaced by modern technology, I completely disagree with that statement owing to a number of compelling reasons.
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 with, the most rational justification is that, reading
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newspaper
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the newspaper
a newspaper
 has become
a
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an
unchangable
not changeable or subject to change
unchangeable
 habit for people over the years. A good illustration of
this
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 is, reading the morning
newspaper
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 and drinking tea is a common morning habit among most people. Yet, another compelling argument against statement is that, since reading e-books
is
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are
 harmful for eyesight many people try to prevent vision problems by avoiding reading it.
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, headache caused by the destructive effects of electronic waves on the eyes.
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This in
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This, in
 turn, will appear by excessive staring at a mobile or computer screen.
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, old age people who do not have much knowledge
o
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of
 technology will not be able to read e-books and prefer to use the traditional
newspaper
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 and magazines to increase awareness and fill leisure time
instead
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. To be concluded, considering the points discussed above, the most rational conclusion to be drawn is that, traditional paper and magazines will not be represented by e-books.
This
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 is mainly Because people do not easily give up their habits.
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