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Nowadays university education is considered very important for people's future. However, there are a lot of successful people who didn't get higher education.

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 of all, the figure shows the total of men and women in
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education
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 in Britain in three periods. The
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 of the
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 of
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the people
 who were studying full-time were less than 600 thousands in any period,
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, the
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 of the people who were studying part-time were larger than 1600 thousands in any period.
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 of
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 information, there were larger than 1000 thousand people studying part-time over full-time in any period.
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, the
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 of people studying part-time was increasing over the periods,
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, the number of people studying part-time were larger in 1990
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1991 than in 1980
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1981. In the same way happened to full-time
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 in females.
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, the total of males studying full-time
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 decreased,
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, the total of males studying part-time was smaller in 1990
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91 than in 1970
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71. To
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 up, there were more people studying part-time
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 than full-time
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. In general, the
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 of people studying were increasing,
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 in the beginning the females were less than males the percentage was reverted as time goes by, and in 1990
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91 there were more females studying than males.

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