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These data sources clearly communicates the values of clothing
export
to three natio
ns Colombia, Jap
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nations, Colombia
an and
Myanmar
over the period of 4 years. Overall, while there was an uptrend in the statistics of the
export
to Colombia and
Myanmar
, a downward trend could be seen in the Japan's
figure
.
In addition
,
Myanmar
is the only nation had a dramatic fluctuation.   In 1999, the
export
earning from Japan made up around 580 millions of dollars, compared to Colombia and
Myanmar
, which were 460 billions of dollars and only 10 millions of dollars respectively. In the
next
year, the values of
export
to
Myanmar
abrup
tly surg
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abrupt
e by nearly 800 millions of dollars over a year, while Japan's
figure
had a slight lull at 530 milli
ons. 
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million
From 2000 to 2003, the
export
values of
Myanmar
continuously increased and reached a peak at roughly 930 millions of dollars in 2001 before hit a
lo
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hitting
w of 350 milli
ons in 2
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million
002. Colombia had a gradual climb, with the
figure
reaching 700 millions of dollars before standing at around 600 millions of dollars in the end of the period. The
figure
for Japan's
export
earning fell steadily, with the
figure
standing at under 500 millions of dollars in 2003.
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