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The world today is a safer place than it was a hundred years ago, and governments should stop spending large amounts of money on their armed forces. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#world #place #years #governments #amounts #money #forces
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It is
long time
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a long time
, the
world
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, nowadays, has not involved with any significantly clash. Today's,
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world
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the world
 is no comparison with
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the past
 when people spent
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more time
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on
 the battlefield.
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, The
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 is much more secure place than
past
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the past
. It is argued that governments should stop consuming money for developing armed forces while remaining few individuals thinking it is compulsory to make potent armed forces. My essay supports that
army
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 forces are indispensable significant part of nations.
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, always need to give emphasis on the armed forces, in case they are needed.
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 Armed forces can easily handle
serious situation
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a serious situation
serious situations
 in nations. Powerful armed forces
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mean
 strong security of a country in order to others countries take decisions deliberately to attack these countries where mighty Armed forces. It is hardly to say the
world
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 has not any conflict owing to
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recent
 US has ended
Iraq war
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the Iraq war
 though there are continuing some conflicts.
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, powerful countries always want to contribute
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 others countries in the
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. So they, can offensive anytime on under weaker countries
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UK
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the UK
 has not mighty armed forces
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result they
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result, they
 had badly affected
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by
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 war One and still UK
army
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 forces less strong like past situation. It is clearly seen that
government
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 should be kept updated their armed forces. Alongside that, sometimes
countries
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countries'
country
 situations
are gone
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have gone
go
 out of control from
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 hand, in these serious matters are only likely controlled by Armed forces. You can be seen
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in
 America, where has
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the largest
 population and often they involve with battle and
government
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 full up these situations by
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army
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the army
. For
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 reason their
government
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are spending
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is spending
 wider amount of money for aggravating their
army
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 power. To conclude, though it is undoubtedly true to the
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 is as good enough as past, Armed forces play a strong and heroic role to save countries as a filler.
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