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More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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One of the critical problems that the world is facing nowadays is that the number of wild animals is rapidly decreasing to a dangerous level. If
this
problem
 persist, biodiversity will be greatly affected having
negative impact
Suggestion
a negative impact
 on
human being
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human beings
the human being
 in the long run.
This
 essay will discuss two major reasons: human and nature, and some measures can be taken to solve
this
problem
.
Human
Suggestion
Humanity
 and nature are the major causes of reduction in wildlife.
First
, human cut down the forests, where are the natural habitats of wild animals, to build construction, on these areas and use logs for furniture.
Moreover
, hunting animals and selling them for decoration
are
Suggestion
is
 the one of causes from human that make wild animals disappeared.
Second
, natural disasters increase deforestation and some animals that cannot adapt themselves to the environment will vanish. In my opinion, if everybody realizes
this
problem
 and cooperates to reject using thing that make from wild animals and protect their habitat, they will help it a lot.
In addition
, the government should make
more protected area
Suggestion
a more protected area
 to conserve wild animals and their habitat. In conclusion, the
problem
 about decreasing of wild animals is the
problem
 that people must realize and work together to solve it. In the near future, I wish the number of wild
animals
Suggestion
animal
 raising.

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