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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Some feel that humans should be changed, their bad conditions and try to have a better
life
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;
however
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, there are others who believe the best way is that accept a hard
situation
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,
for example
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, lack of enough money and
job
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 dissatisfaction. Both sides of the argument seem to be worth discussion and I believe that prove or
change
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 the
situation
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 depends on the
situation
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. Looking for having an ideal
life
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 without any hardship helps us improve our bad conditions. Trying to
change
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 difficult situations
such
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 as a shortage of money or a
job
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 that we are not happy with, cause to, have blissful
life
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 and in most cases, these efforts lead to progress. Take some simple employees with a low salary as an example, they should get an extra or part-time
job
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 for improving their
life
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 quality and in some cases, they can
change
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 their
job
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. By doing these actions they will probably be more satisfied with their lives.
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, it is understandable why many are against changing a bad
situation
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. It is not clear how much energy and time needs to improve conditions and will these efforts pay off or is it a risk? So it is obvious some people afraid of
change
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.
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, if they
change
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 their
job
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, they would start again and there is no guarantee of having a better
situation
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 in comparison with the previous
job
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.
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, they try to adapt themselves with every condition and their contentment leads to having a stress-free
life
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. In conclusion, I believe it is not necessary to think about
change
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 in any bad circumstance. Sometimes we should live in the moment and enjoy our
life
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, but there is no denying that promotion is good in some situations, so we should analyse the condition before making a decision.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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