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The main cause of global warming is pollution from cars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Global warming is a sad reality today.
However
, while I agree that
pollution
 from automobiles is a cause of global warming, I believe that there are other major factors contributing towards global warming. On the one hand,
pollution
 from cars is clearly one of the major reasons contributing to global warming. The Carbon Dioxide emitted from the vehicles mixes with the air.
As a result
, the
earth
's temperature to rise.
Moreover
, it
also
 leads reaches the planet's atmosphere and depletes the Ozone layer, which results in more Ultra Violet rays entering the
earth
's atmosphere.
However
,
although
pollution
 from cars is a major factor causing the
earth
's temperature to rise, I believe that there are other factors as well. The
first
 major cause is deforestation. Though cars emit Carbon Dioxide, trees are required to convert Carbon Dioxide into Oxygen. Because of
this
 destruction of forests and cutting of trees there is no proper mechanism to control the large number of
pollution
 coming from cars. Another major reason is burning fossil fuel. IT companies need a huge infrastructure in the form of computers and supercomputers to develop softwares and applications, which need great amount of electricity. The electricity to power these huge infrastructure comes from burning fossil fuel.
As a result
, of
this
 the air is polluted and the
earth
's temperature increases. In short, while I agree that
pollution
 from automobiles is a major cause of global warming, I, ultimately, believe that deforestation and burning fossil fuel contribute more to it.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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