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A growing number of people feel animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

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It is generally believed by a group of people that animal rights should be protected and they should not be used for experimentation by human beings while others believe that they can be consumed by human beings for edible requirements and used for
research
 purposes. In my opinion, animals can be used for
research
 purposes as a major breakthrough in the field of medicine came via experiment on animals. The protectors of animal rights believe that these creatures should not be used by human beings, neither for
research
 nor for edible purposes. They believe all the essential nutrients required for the balanced diet of a healthy person can be procured from vegetables.
Hence
 it is absolutely unnecessary to kill animals for
this
 purpose.
Moreover
, the recent
research
 conducted by veterinarians confirms that animals subjected to experiments
also
 feel pain so it should be avoided. According to them
this
 is the selfish nature of human beings that they consider whole universe and all the animals in it are meant to serve them and they can use it in any way they want.
Hence
,
this
 criminal attitude should be curbed and animal rights should be protected.
On the other hand
, some people believe and I agree that animals should be used for
research
 purposes as it is sole reason which made the modern medicine with its advancements possible.
In other words
, all the injections and drugs we are using in the present era, their initial trials were conducted on animals. Only after successful trials on animals they were approved by the food and drug administration authority to be utilised on humans. Useless experimentation on animals have been banned several years ago just like previously animals were used for cosmetic testing. In conclusion, while people may disagree with their opinion, experimentation on animals and using them for food is fully justified and like the past may result in the invention of many life saving vaccines.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exploitation
  • Animal welfare
  • Ethical treatment
  • Vegetarianism
  • Veganism
  • Cognitive dissonance
  • Humane
  • Live stock
  • Cruelty-free
  • Bioethics
  • Conservation
  • Habitat preservation
  • Ecosystem
  • Biodiversity
  • Animal testing
  • Synthetic biology
  • Genetic engineering
  • Speciesism
  • Animal husbandry
  • Sustainable farming
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