It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older people than that of young people in many countries in the future. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
There is growing interest revolving around the fact that the proportion of people who is old will be higher than the percentage of young people in the future. While there are more inevitable problems arising from younger people, I personally believe
that the benefit it
brings about Suggestion
the benefit that it
are
more rewarding.
One evident Suggestion
being
drawbacks
is that youngster will not have enough Suggestion
drawback
experiences
to Suggestion
experience
slove
every problems compare to elder citizens. Every find the solution to (a problem or question) or understand the meaning of
solve
problems
are not easy for Suggestion
problem
unexperiences
people to solve so to solve lacking practical experience or training
inexperienced
it easily
they need the extensive experiences Accept comma addition
it, easily
from
older people. Suggestion
of
In addition
that, the salary that companies have to pay to the older people will less than youngster so it help companies save a large amount of money to invest in projects to
the future. Suggestion
for
in
into
Accordingly
, saving a large amount of money can also
help companies to solve their immidiate
difficulties.
of the present time and place
immediate
However
, there are undeniable benefits of higher proportion
of young citizens, the most considerable of which is that companies will have an abundant Suggestion
a higher proportion
labor
source. It is true to say that having an abundant a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
labor
force is a big advantage for any company that wants to rise up and stand firm in the future, productivity will increase leading to an increase in the economy of both company and country. An a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
addition
advantage is that youngsters are faster in catching up the trends, technology and from that the Suggestion
added
knowlegde
of societies in the country will be improved. the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
Last
but not least, eventhough
the salary that the company have to pay to the young people is more than elderly, not to mention young people who are more productive, Suggestion
even though
therefore
have to pay some extra overtime fees. Conversely
, the retired fee that the government pay to the retired workers is much more compares
to youngsters’s salaries. Suggestion
comparable
compared
comparatively
Follwing
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Following
this
, the economy of the country will be decreased overtime
.
In conclusion, the Suggestion
over time
higher of proportion
of younger citizens deal more benefits than elderly. The main three benefits that the youngsters are the economy, catching trends and an abundant Suggestion
higher proportion
labor
source.a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
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