Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter: say in general what you like about shopping in your area say what is wrong with the facilities suggest how they can be improved

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Dear Sir/Mam, I am writing

this

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letter to bring your attention to

Greater

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the Greater

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Kailash M block market where I frequently visit to shop. The market has all the major brands which

makes

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make

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it shoppers

one stop

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one-stop

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. There are,

however

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, there are a number of areas which require improvement

to begin

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with the parking space is small in comparison to the number of visitors, especially on weekends.

Moreover

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, vegetable & meat shop in between the shopping field which makes the shopping experience unpleasant. Cleanliness is

also

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another major concern, I think it would be better if the council could build multilevel parking in place of the present parking space.

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, if they can move vegetable & meat shops outside the shopping range, which in return attract more shoppers. I will appreciate

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you share my feedback with the concerned authorities and publish

this

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information in your newspaper. Thanks for your support. I look forward to hearing from you Yours Faithfully Bhavna Malik

Submitted by bhavna on Sat Apr 25 2020

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

161 words

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Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter: say in general what you like about shopping in your area say what is wrong with the facilities suggest how they can be improved

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Nowadays we see an increase in social problems involving teenagers. Many people believe that it is because parents spend more time at work and less with their children. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that professional athletes serve as positive role models for young people, while others argue that their behaviour both on and off the field, can have negative influences. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Professional sports people are often idolised by young children. Some people think that they therefore have a responsibility to be good role models at all times for children. Do you agree or disagree?

Pollution and other environmental problems are resulting from a country's developing and becoming richer. Some think this can not be avoided. To what extent do you agree or disagree