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2- Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea, some think they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree?

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Plastic
 bags are no doubt very useful in many ways, but it has its own dis-
advanges
the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
advantages
also
.
Firstly
, to discuss its advantages, It is easy to carry, fold and bring wet and some other food items
also
.
For example
, food items like - mutton, meat, chicken, beef, fish etc. It's easy to bring them in
plastic
 bags, Use and through them. Especially, for above said items
plastic
 bags are much useful. Because, these food items, will have a bad smell.
Secondly
, it is easy to carry wet items in
plastic
 bags.
For instance
, milk, curd, butter, cheese, ice cream boxes etc. If these wet items carried in a cloth
bag
,
bag
Suggestion
the bag
 will become wet and we have to dry it. After some times use, we have to wash it, to re-use it.
otherwise
Suggestion
Otherwise
 it will start stinking after some time.
Thirdly
, fruits,
for instance
, grapes, can get squeezed, sometimes within the
bag
, in those cases, cloth bags will get drenched, where as there is no problem with
plastic
bag
, as it is used & through. Actually, the major disadvantage of these
plastic
 bags is, these do not dissolve, and when eaten by animals it will harm and kill them. Recent studies shown that many fishes and some other aquatic animals in the sea
also
 died because of these
plastic
 bags. Since, we have a lot of illiteracy in India and people are very stubborn, it's difficult to educate them and make them practise the safety rules. So, to conclude, it is better to ban them.
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