IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy.Which opinion do you agree with?Discuss both options and give example.

#people #pets #children #options
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Keeping pets with children is a highly
debateable
open to doubt or debate
debatable
 topic, both the benefits and drawbacks hold equal
weightage
Suggestion
.
Accept space
.
However
Linking Words
, every problem comes with a solution, all we need to do is find it and adjust according to our circumstances. A recent video of a dog playing and taking
care
Use synonyms
 of a
child
Use synonyms
 is winning hearts on the internet.
Linking Words
this
Suggestion
This
example supports
Accept comma addition
example, supports
 the view of having a
pet
Use synonyms
 as it has
also
Linking Words
 been found that son trained pets take
care
Use synonyms
 of the
child
Use synonyms
 in the absence of the parents or the guardians.
Moreover
Linking Words
, when parents are busy the
child
Use synonyms
 get
acompany
Suggestion
a company
 of friendly and a
care
Use synonyms
 taker friend.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, in some cases
pets
Suggestion
the pets
 harm children in difficult ways when not taken
care
Use synonyms
 of.Few cases have been reported of pets being violent with children
at
Suggestion
in
 some
suvere
intensely or extremely bad or unpleasant in degree or quality
severe
 cases.
Furthermore
Linking Words
,
Accept space
,
if not taken
care
Use synonyms
 properly, the hairs of the
pet
Use synonyms
 can cause infections or the disease to the
child
Use synonyms
,
in
Linking Words
addition if
Accept comma addition
addition, if
 the proper vaccination course is not completed of the dog, the dog may react violently due to irritation or the
child
Use synonyms
 may catch the disease. In my opinion, I would recommend to have a
Use synonyms
pet but
Accept comma addition
pet, but
 carefully, as well as, the
pet
Use synonyms
 should be trained and healthy to avoid unfavourable circumstances.
Submitted by zghumaan07 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • companion
  • responsibility
  • care
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • social skills
  • transmit
  • diseases
  • allergies
  • safety risks
  • time
  • effort
  • money
  • mature
  • handle
What to do next:
Look at other essays: