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Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter: say in general what you like about shopping in your area say what is wrong with the facilities suggest how they can be improved

#newspaper #area #facilities
Dear Sir/Mam, I am writing
this
 letter to express my opinion on the decreasing eminence of
Greater
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 Kailash M block market where.Substantially, International shopping brands and stupendous restaurants since I visit frequently, which makes it a top place for shopping and popular among international tourists. There are,
however
, in my
opinion
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 has areas of advancements due to various reasons.
Firstly
, limited parking space, due to the
increase
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 number of vehicle parking
space
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spaces
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 has become a major challenge
especially
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 on
weekend
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weekends
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. Regrettably, the cleanliness and hygiene of public convenience have been disappointingly deleterious. As I am aware that your newspaper is widely read and if you run a poll you will get the real feedback.
Also
, I would like to share my suggestions for
the
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improvement,
such
 as authorities should construct multilevel parking which will increase the vehicle parking capacity.
Finally
,
a
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the
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 number of public convenience staff should be increased to maintain hygiene & cleanliness along with shift roster and should be strictly supervised. I will appreciate
if
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it if
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 you publish an editorial and refining
shopping
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the shopping
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 experience. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Faithfully, Bhavna Malik
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