All children should be given a free laptop when they start high school. Do you agree or disagree?
There is an argument that a complimentary
laptop
should be provided to all the children as they begin high school. This
essay agrees with this
statement,
because in a Remove the comma
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nowadays
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laptop
computer is a necessary tool and give
students more opportunities in the teaching process.
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Firstly
, having the proper tools in the education process gives a lot of benefits. It lets
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save
time, so the students can focus on the key tasks. The current students have access to new technologies and they can Correct subject-verb agreement
saves
use
them. Laptops make research, writing, reading, communication, collaboration, and presentations easier. For example
; pupils who want to do their homework, do not have to go to the library. They can use
online books or use
the school website to find every material which they need. That gives them extra time to do it more accurately and correctly.
Secondly
, the access to a laptop
is very helpful in the syllabus. That gives opportunities to do it
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easier
and more Rephrase
more easily
efficient
. The pupils can exploit a lot of software Change the word
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such
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This
tool gives one more benefit, as well. The schoolchildren can adopt them in special situations. Instance; in pandemic time they can continue their education process, they
can study without leaving home.
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and they
provide
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providing
laptop
for every
who starts high school is essential to allow every student to develop and give the same chance for everyone to access Correct your spelling
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