International travel is becoming coming cheaper and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourist. Do the advantage of increased tourists outweigh disadvantages.

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Many people travel for vacation. Nowadays

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the business of providing services to tourists

tourism

is developing day by day

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Some countries open their doors to more and more tourists. It would have benefits and drawback.I think

upsides

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the upsides

outweigh drawback.

First

and

foremost I

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foremost, I

strongly believe that

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able to improve government budget. If countries open their doors for

traveling

the act of going from one place to another

travelling

it will go up income generation

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example Large hotels or small local shops

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Government resorts

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The government resorts

employ local people.

Also

small businesses

such

as small shops and cafes sell local products like a souvenir.And

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the business of providing services to tourists

tourism

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truism

can acquaint countries.

For

instance when

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instance, when

we hear France we image tower of France. That's why the

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the business of providing services to tourists

tourism

industry will improve

economy

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the economy

of cities and countries.

However international

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However, international

travel has disadvantages.

Firstly to

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Firstly, to

mix a

nations

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nation

and culture. Countries can lose their tradition

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Secondly it

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Secondly, it

would be detrimental for

environment

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environments

an environment

with a lot of bins

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It grows crowded places

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Lastly there

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Lastly, there

is a high rate of the disease being spread by international travellers.

This

is more prominent among visitors from epidemic countries.

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COVID-19 has now become a disease that has now become a worldwide epidemic. In conclusion I can say that while

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the act of drawing a plan or diagram or outline

tracing

tourism

is harmful

becuase

for the reason that; on account of

because

of health and environmental

its

Suggestion

Its

benefits outweigh and demerits it might possess.

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International travel is becoming coming cheaper and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourist. Do the advantage of increased tourists outweigh disadvantages.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to only be meant for adults. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. What are its causes, and what solutions can be offered?

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the cause of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

the exposure of international media such as films tv and magazines has impacts on local culture. what do you think of the impacts have been? Do you agree the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.