International travel is becoming coming cheaper and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourist. Do the advantage of increased tourists outweigh disadvantages.

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Many people travel for vacation. Nowadays
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the business of providing services to tourists
tourism
is developing day by day
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Some countries open their doors to more and more tourists. It would have benefits and drawback.I think
upsides
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the upsides
outweigh drawback.
First
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and
foremost I
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foremost, I
strongly believe that
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able to improve government budget. If countries open their doors for
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
it will go up income generation
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As
a
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an
example Large hotels or small local shops
.
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Government resorts
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The government resorts
employ local people.
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small businesses
such
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as small shops and cafes sell local products like a souvenir.And
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the business of providing services to tourists
tourism
tracing
truism
can acquaint countries.
For
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instance when
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instance, when
we hear France we image tower of France. That's why the
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the business of providing services to tourists
tourism
industry will improve
economy
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the economy
of cities and countries.
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However international
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However, international
travel has disadvantages.
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Firstly to
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Firstly, to
mix a
nations
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nation
and culture. Countries can lose their tradition
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Secondly it
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Secondly, it
would be detrimental for
environment
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environments
an environment
with a lot of bins
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It grows crowded places
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Lastly there
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Lastly, there
is a high rate of the disease being spread by international travellers.
This
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is more prominent among visitors from epidemic countries.
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COVID-19 has now become a disease that has now become a worldwide epidemic. In conclusion I can say that while
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the act of drawing a plan or diagram or outline
tracing
tourism
is harmful
becuase
for the reason that; on account of
because
of health and environmental
its
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Its
benefits outweigh and demerits it might possess.

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