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There are many people who go to live in different countries. To what extent should people be allowed to move freely between countries and live where they choose? What are the benefits and drawbacks of this?

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Many people these days immigrate to different countries in search of job opportunities, better education and quality lifestyle.
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, some people believe that
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 free movement of migrants must be restricted while others say it must not be regulated. I strongly agree that, nations' borders must remain open to legal migrants and people must have the right to work and settle in any
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 of their choice.
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. One hand, individuals from different caste, community, race living in a particular location would lead to an ethnic diversity.
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 diversity may lead to disharmony amongst the settlers due to differences in their views and upbringing which ultimately leads to racism. Even though racism can have negative implications, in most developed countries, the citizens are far more liberal and
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, feels weak.
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, when people from different geographical locations meet together, they share their experience and learnings. These exposures and teachings can be used to solve major problems of the community,
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 contributing towards socioeconomic growth. Even though manpower is a major driving force of any economy, many countries lack lack development due to their unfriendly approach towards immigration,
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 as Germany and Italy. Countries with manpower shortage are unable to expand their industries due to high labour cost.
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, many countries, like Canada, promote immigration programs to help other nationals work and settle in their
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 as it aids in its growth. In conclusion,
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, falls short against the positive implications
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 as solving national problems, with the varied experience new immigrants bring with them, and the boost
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, increased manpower, provides
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 the economy. All in all, I strongly agree that people from different nationalities must be allowed to freely travel to other territories and settle in places of their choice.
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