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The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population, This is causing problems not only for poor, undeveloped countries, but also for industrialised and developing nations. Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes, and suggest at least one possible solution. You should write at least 250 words. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task

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The
world
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's
population
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 is on prodigious
rise
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, which is a worldwide problem, is creating difficulties for not only, poor and underdeveloped nations but
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, developed and developing countries
.
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In my opinion, overpopulation is responsible for
significant number
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a significant number
 of issues all around the globe
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 as starvation, pollution.
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, it has been noticed that the rate at which
population
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 is growing is on
rise
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 over
last
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 few decades which has exacerbated the situation.Due to continuous
rise
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 in
population
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,
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,
countries around the
world
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 have been in the spot of bother as it has been
one
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 of the detrimental factors to satisfy the basic needs of people. The continuous increase in
population
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 is creating difficulties which are tough to handle.
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, natural resources are being consumed at excessively high rate, which
also
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 results in excessive pollution.Huge
population
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 means soaring demand of food and it has become a major worry for the nations to meet increasing demand which has resulted in
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rise
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a rise
 in deaths around the
world
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 due to starvation.
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, to deal with the surge in
population
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, extreme steps have to
implemented
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implement
 by respective nations.
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, in
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last decade China
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the last decade, China
the last decade China
 implemented a rule that a family
can not
can not
cannot
 have more than
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 child.
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 step had positive outcome as China was able to slow down the rate of increase enormously.Various other steps
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 as reward programmes in the form of free education for
one
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 child, can be launched so that parents are encouraged to have not more than
one
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 child. To conclude
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overpopulation is
gigantic problem
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a gigantic problem
 around the
world
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 and it has to be controlled substantially else more people will die
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by
 starvation in poor countries and
life
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live
 in affluent countries will
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 worsen.
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