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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The consciousness of saving habitat and
environment
Suggestion
the environment
 has become crucial in
this
 contemporary world. It is argued by some politicians and activists that biodiversity and nature could only save if governments and giant corporate companies are involved rather than individuals’ minor effort. I strongly support
this
 belief and
this
 essay will examine how to tackle
this
 issue.
First
 of all, the pollution which affects the
environment
 in a bad way is mostly caused by factories. Many factories around the world release its gases to the atmosphere and wastewaters to river or sea. To prevent the
environment
, owners of the companies have to be informed by authorities to take actions.
However
, it has been observed that these facilities do not tend to take the necessary precautions.
Furthermore
, governments should take care of nature and variety of species.
In other words
, if the governments publish a law to ensure that factories have to have an efficient water treatment system for wastewater and filter system for hazardous gases, the habitat could be saved.
On the other hand
, the environmental activists have been protesting the governments and factories for a long time to press them to raise not only the power of the laws but
also
 awareness of the importance of saving the
environment
.
Moreover
, most of the citizens generally pay attention to not throw out the garbage to forest or streets. In fact, as per academic research published by WHO, it states that the effect of the individual movement to improve the
environment
 is only 5%, while the law is %40 and giant companies and their facilities are %55. In conclusion, in the light of information given above, I am strongly convinced that while all citizens take an action to develop and save nature by protesting or individually, the governments should publish a law to guarantee that the companies take action due to their impact area.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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