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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that men and women have different qualities. Despite these seeming stereotypes, many universities are gradually allowing every subject to have the same number of students in both genders. I totally agree with
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 change. In the
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 place, universities had better respect everyone’s interest and abilities. Undoubtedly, not all girls or
boys have
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boys, have
 similar hobbies and biases, which mainly depend on their personalities and living environment.
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, a girl born in a martial-art-tradition family may have an orientation towards army universities.
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, a boy loving
kids
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kid
 might want to major in kindergarten pedagogy.
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, to take full advantage of a person’s talent, educators should never restrict their propensity and taste. What is more, male and female students together can create a comfortable and exciting study environment. It is said that each sex has its own specific characteristics.
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, while boys tend to be open-minded and funny, girls are sensitive and detailed sometimes. Thanks to the balance between them, the field can be studied and
analyzed
examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
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 through different methods, so the lessons’ effectiveness will be enhanced. To summarize, both girls and boys ought to be given the same amount of opportunity in every subject
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 university. I strongly advocate that gender should not be a barrier for their skills and aptitudes to shine.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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