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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

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How to behave with other people should be taught to children early. While some support the factor
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of
 competition, others insist on the importance of cooperation.
Although
 two opinions have their own positive sides, I would agree with the
second
 on. On the one hand, competition can become a motivation for children to boost themselves. Obviously,
noone
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no one
 can resist the satisfaction and happiness of becoming a winner.
Moreover
, the shame of losing or being worse than others is often listed
in people’s most
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in most people’s
 fears. Taking part in a contest provides children with targets to complete and opponents to win.
For example
, thanks to
Olympics
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the Olympics
, several candidates from all around the world can challenge themselves and be trained to their highest limits.
On the other hand
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe every child should learn to
work
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work, instead
instead
 of
compete
Suggestion
competing
 with others.
Firstly
,
teamwork skill
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teamwork, skill
 is undoubtedly essential, especially when having a job. In
fact every
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fact, every
 walk of life requires teaming with others, namely, prepare a group presentation in class, live with family members or build ideas for a marketing project.
Therefore
, a good cooperation can lead to higher efficiency in work.
Moreover
, through working with others, children can learn various basic moral lessons,
for example
, respect other opinions and protect your own. To conclude, both competition and teamwork can have a positive
effects
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effect
 on children,
however
,
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appropriate to; intended for
for
 the sake of their future,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe handling cooperation skill well can do them better.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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