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Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree?

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In today’s
world
technology
 experts and
scientist
 will have more value than a musician and artist. In my opinion, I believe that musician and artist are less valued due to their work than scientists and experts in
technology
 as their work impacts the
world
 by improving the quality of life and keeping the
world
 connected. Science and
technology
 are the pillars of the modern era and
scientist
 in different fields are continuously adding to their work for the well-being of humanity and
thus
 deserve more value. As the science has advanced into space
,
Accept space
,
the data collected by the
scientist
 are used on a daily basis,
suchsuch
to so extreme a degree
such
such such
 as using navigation systems in our cars to giving the information about our local traffic to the forecast of weather, which makes our life better.
In addition
 to
this
scientist
 are into medicine searching for the cures of diseases, making vaccines, always keeping ahead and contributing towards society.
Furthermore
, automation experts
such
 as engineers, which are in information
technology
 or mechanics develops machines which improve our quality of life. These machines do the jobs for us which were impossible in a past or took lot of time and effort. The machine
such
 as excavators
,
Accept space
,
diggers, drillers are used for the development purposes.
On the other hand
 internet and social media has improved the communication all over the
world
. In conclusion, science and
technology
 have drastically improved and impacted our lives, so the value of engineers and scientists has improved too.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valued
  • modern society
  • scientists
  • technology experts
  • musicians
  • artists
  • reliance
  • scientific advancements
  • practical benefits
  • driving economic growth
  • daily lives
  • culture
  • human emotions
  • express ideas
  • provoke thought
  • spiritual well-being
  • emotional well-being
  • preserving cultural heritage
  • subjective nature
  • diversity
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