you recently went t a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. you want to tell him how you feel. write a letter to the singer. In your letter say how you feel about his performance give details of your musical activities explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

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Dear Kim Lee, I am writing

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letter to say congratulations to you for your outstanding performance in the music concert, which

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yesterday at the city Emporium. Your performance was

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to me. I always wish to see your live performance and yesterday was

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one of the best

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of my life. I am an aspiring musician and I started to play electric guitar and drums at

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tender age of 9.

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, I have been a member of a local rock band music band called "window of dreams" for the

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five years. We primarily focus on playing pop and rock soul. You are always my idol musician and songwriter. I am sure you are terribly busy in your hectic life. But, I am really hoping that you would share some tips to help me to do better with the melody. I would highly appreciate

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you if you can provide some help to enhance my skills and boost my confidence. Thank you very much for your contribution

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the tuner world. Yours sincerely, Jaswinder

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 8.0

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180 words

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