Trying to save endangered animal species from extinction is a waste of valuable resources. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The question of whether
nor
Correct word choice
or
show examples
not we should try to save endangered
species
is definitely a controversial
one
.
Although
some people argue that these
animals
are not useful and we should let them die in the same way that many others ( like the dinosaurs ) have
die
Wrong verb form
died
show examples
out before,
i
Change the capitalization
I
show examples
personally believe that endangered
species
are actually worth saving. There
tow
Correct your spelling
two
show examples
main reasons for
this
. First of all, it is important for us to recognise the key role that endangered
species
play in nature. The
environment
is made
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
for fragile ecosystems, where
plans
Correct your spelling
plants
show examples
and
animals
all rely on
one
another to survive. If
one
animal
disappear
Correct subject-verb agreement
disappears
show examples
or a new
one
is introduced, it upsets the balance of nature and affects other
animals
above and below it
tin
Correct your spelling
in
show examples
the food chain by changing the
environment
that they live in. These changes often come back to affect us in ways that we do not expect. In the same way that rabbits introduced
Australia
Change preposition
to Australia
show examples
by the British now eat the plants that many native
animals
need to live and ruin farmer’s crops, the extinction of a predatory animal would allow its prey to reproduce out of control and would probably cause plagues.
Thus
, because
environment
Replace the word
environmental
show examples
change is actually a danger to us, we clearly have an interest in saving endangered
species
.
However
, maybe the strongest argument for saving endangered
species
is that all life is valuable in and of itself. Even
of
Correct your spelling
if
show examples
these
animals
do not have any practical use, they should still be saved.
Furthermore
, because human activity has destroyed the natural living
environment
of many endangered
species
, we should do the best we can to save them.
To conclude
,
i
Change the capitalization
I
show examples
feel that endangered
animal
Fix the agreement mistake
animals
show examples
are indeed worth saving. They not only
their
Add a missing verb
have their
show examples
own value
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
but the balance of nature would be disturbed if that died out.
Submitted by jamolkh22 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • endangered species
  • extinction
  • preserve
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • ecological roles
  • conservation efforts
  • scientific discoveries
  • advancements
  • cultural value
  • aesthetic value
  • employment opportunities
  • local economies
  • ethical responsibility
What to do next:
Look at other essays: