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Band 6

There are severe social consequences to housing shortages in cities and only the government can solve these problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has been argued that the lack of housing in towns lead to unbearable social issues and merely the government authorities have the capability to handle those problems.
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, I completely disagree with the statement because there are other platforms to resolve these issues.
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, considering the individual contribution towards the society, can minimize the problems due to lack of houses.
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, in order to reduce the problems everyone need to treat these social issues as their responsibility. By having enough support of individuals, the majority of issues related to housing will be resolved.
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, considering it as an individual problem,
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 people can sort out the issues of community level. With the resolution of every community, apparently it leads to solve the nations. Apart from the individuals help, we do have several organizations whose primary focus is to look after the various accommodation related issues. As part of companies, by providing enormous support in terms of funds, awareness about the problem, and by precautionary measurements to avoid those unnecessary housing issues.
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 to that, with the limited functions of
oraganization
a group of people who work together
organization
organizations
 result in a drastic decrease in society concerns.
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, in India, over 70 per
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 of issues will be solved by handling them as community level
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 treating them as the government responsibility to resolve. To conclude, in my view, the social issues will treated as negligible and able to provide proper solutions with enormous support of individual and other communities.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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