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What are advantages and disadvantages of differences between cultures

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Advantages and disadvantages of differences between cultures. There are merits and demerits of
cultures
Suggestion
culture
 differences. In my opinion the pros of the cultures variations outweigh their cons. On the one hand, learning about other peoples' customs and habits can lead to
economical
Suggestion
economic
 benefits.
For example
, in some
cultures especially
Accept comma addition
cultures, especially
 in Eastern countries women should not reveal their body, so it can be a good idea to manufacture veils in order to sell them in those countries. Knowing that the main meal in Italy and Spain is lunch gives the entrepreneurs an idea about what they should offer if they start a food
business
 in those countries.
On the other hand
, the misunderstanding is likely to appear among partners due to differences in customs and habits, and could result in losing a good deal in
business
.
For instance
, after
business
 lunch is over and followed with an invitation to join a dancing party or a night club, the refusal of
this
 invitation will be considered as an offend in Japan and a collapse of the
business
 could come as
consequence
Suggestion
a consequence
.
Although
 in most cases the polite explanation is accepted. To sum up, the disadvantages of cultures variations outweigh the disadvantages.
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