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Central and local government make a frantic attempt to promote festivals to create a lot of revenue. Some people think this money should be invested in social programs for the poor.

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Nowadays, we live in an age of modern society.
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, central and local authority tries to promote festival so as to increase revenue.
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, some people believe that it is necessary to invest money in social programs for the poor. I agree that money used for social program needs to be prioritized.
On the other hand
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, it is undeniable that investing festival will bring a great deal of advantages. The revenue which comes from promoting festivals may become the crucial elements to deal with financial disorder.
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, it should be highlighted that improving tourists can lead to enhancing reputations in the local area. If the local union makes a frantic attempt to promote festivals, local cities will become one of the best destinations for tourists.
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, I believe that there are a number of advantages to investing money in social programs
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 of festivals.
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 of all, the demand of the poor is more pressing than others. Some researchers point out that the number of unemployment is increasing annual yearly.
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, unemployed people have a tendency to become poorer. Because the rate of jobless people will have a lot of negative effects on society, state need to backup them. Another point is that promoting social programs play a vital role in decreasing social issues. A reason for
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 that if central and local government subsidize the amount of the budget which are provided for medicine and charity, the life quality of citizen will be improved. As a consequence, people do not have worry about their life and the number of crimes will be decreased. To sum up,
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 promoting festivals have a lot of positive influences on creating revenue. Central and local state should focus on investing in social programs for the poor.
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