The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The given bar chart elucidates the information regarding the proportion of
people
visiting at cinema, theatre, library and zoo. The percentage is divided into three categories which are new migrants
born in other countries
, new migrants
born in english
speaking Change the capitalization
English
countries
and the
Correct article usage
apply
people
who born
in Add a missing verb
were born
Canada
.
Having quick
glance it is apparent that the highest volume of masses visiting cinemas in Correct article usage
a quick
Canada
are the
born in Correct your spelling
those
Canada
, which are
70%, Correct subject-verb agreement
is
whereas
, 65% migrants
from other Change preposition
of migrants
english
nations visit there and only 50% Change the capitalization
English
migrants
from other Change preposition
of migrants
countries
go there, probing ahead, significantly lower rate of inhabitants can be seen who are visiting the theatre which are 10% migrants
from other countries
, 25% from english
speaking Change the capitalization
English
countries
and 20% from Canada
born masses.
Moving towards the rest of the information the sufficient amount of folks visited
on library in Correct pronoun usage
who visited
Canada
is
the new Unnecessary verb
apply
migrants
born in other countries
which are
50%, Correct subject-verb agreement
is
although
40% new
Change preposition
of new
migrants
born in english
speaking regions go there and 37% born in Change the capitalization
English
Canada
who visited there. Lastly
, the minimum capacity of migrants
born in other countries
are
35%, Change the verb form
is
50
% of new Change preposition
with 50
migrants
born in english
speaking Change the capitalization
English
countries
visiting there and 42% who born in Canada
.
To sum up
, it is appeared
that there are fewer Change to the active voice
appears
has appeared
people
who visit at
the theatre. Change preposition
apply
On the other hand
, the people
who go to the cinema have greatly risen Correct quantifier usage
number of people
portion
of the Change preposition
in portion
inhabitants
rather than another three categories.Correct quantifier usage
number of inhabitants
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
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