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The internet is a great course of information and has opened up opportunities for people to learn over the world. Is all information reliable on internet? What could be done to control information online?

#internet #course #information #opportunities #people #world #control
It is undeniable fact that
internet
 pro
vides al
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the internet
l kinds of
information
 for users ev
ery
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to
where. I consider that some facts on
internet
 do
not deli
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the internet
very correctly and it can be restricted by government.
Initially
, there several reasons why
information
 on
internet
 is
not alwa
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the internet
ys decent for people.
Firstly
, there are numerous sites which are not officially and they do not represent acceptable
information
 for society. In different social networking sites people often suffer false
information
 which is shared one without having any knowledge about it.
Secondly
,
internet
 is
essentia
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the internet
l and bulk part of media and it can be used according to personal interest in terms of political.
T
hat is wh
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politics
y
internet
 has
impact
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the internet
enorm
ous on
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impacted
 people.
Finally
, people who obtain
information
 though
inter
net sh
by means of; with aid of; through the act or agency of; "destroyed by fire"
through
ould be careful that it is whether official or not.
On the other hand
, some measures can be taken to adjust or to cancel
information
 which stems from incorrect sources.
Additionally
, penalties can be accepted by government for ones who pos
t wr
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the ones
ong
information
. To sum up, people acquire
information
 from only official sites and government should supervise all
information
 on
internet
.
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the internet
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