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The continued rise in the world's population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. what are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

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In recent days, the
population
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 of numerous nations rising and the
problem
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 of increase of public faced at worldwide. The two major causes happened due to overpopulation like as, scarcity and unemployment.
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 think that
this
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problem
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 is severe for humans.
To begin
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 with, Few
nation people
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nation, people
 have some superstition for
having a more children and few believe
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believing a more children and few
having a more children and few believe
 that one boy should have as a child. So, they
can not
can not
cannot
 control on birth rate.
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, uneducated people have not aware
from
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of
this
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 condition. The thinking ability of their is lower rather than another.
For example
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, the
indian
a member of the race of people living in America when Europeans arrived
Indian
nation people
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nation, people
 believe in two
child
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children
, perhaps
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 why the
population
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 of
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
 is around 123
carore
move while supporting, either in a vehicle or in one's hands or on one's body
carries
 which is highest in the world. Another reason for that, people should migrate to the
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 country, which have already a
highest
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high
higher
population
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. I deem that the
problem
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 of
population
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 is dangerous for human and it gives numerous consequences to the human's life.
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First
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The first problem
problem
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 of these
issue
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issues
, numerous of
student graduate
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student, graduate
 from the University and the company have limited vacancy for them.
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 why, they have not their desired jobs which is
happened
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happening
 because of
population
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.
Secondly
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, the land for farming are converting to the building. So that
,
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,
 farmers grow
food
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 in limited space The
food
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 is
quitly
with low volume
quietly
 lower than the total number of people live in the world
.
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.
Hence
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, the price of
food
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 is increasing
,
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,
 the poor people should not afford expensive
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food so, they
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food, so they
 suffer from the scarcity issue. To conclude,
population
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 is considerate
problem
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 for worldwide and it increases day by day
.
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.
 There are numerous consequences which are faced by the human.
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, if people become aware
from
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of
this
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situation so, we
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situation, so we
 can easily solve
this
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problem
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.

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