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OVER THE LAST FEW DECADES,THE MEDIA HAS PROMOTED THE IMAGE OF YOUNG THIN WOMEN AS BEING IDEAL. WHATS PROBLEMS HAS THIS CAUSED? WHAT SOLUTIONS CAN YOU SUGGEST TO THIS ISSUE.

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The media has brought significant changes to our lives in recents years with coming of the digital era and internet, people are highly reliable on advertisement and media has selected pretty girls as a good inspiration of body fitness and energy. So, I intend to explore the source of
this problems
Suggestion
this problem
these problems
 along with some viable solutions to it. To regard with some possible factors of
this
 trend.It is true that, slim models are encouraging to people for making their body fit,
however in
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however, in
 reality, human beings consider it wrong they allow them in order to promote beauty.As a consequence, they eat less rather than eating a well balanced diet and
this
 practice may be invited few fitness issues like weak muscles, pain in joints and so on in the future.Another point is that, teenagers follow on actress or a model as a aspiring to become same as them due to
this
, eating disorders may develop by remaining slim.
Also
, it puts negative influences upon careers because after crossing the age of 30, opportunities of finding a job become very rare.By
this
, women may go into depression, sometimes committed suicide as well. Moving
further
 with possible action in the favour of address
this
 practice.Primary, media can play a crucial role to stop its bad outcomes if they broadcast realistic programs.
For instance
, movies should show females as strong, independent and career oriented
instead
 of slim and petite.Having said that women should pay attention upon their strength as well as adopt good habits
such
 as eating well, exercise, play games in results, women could look attractive, physically and mentally fit as long as prevent well-being issues which can be occurred in coming years. In conclusion, I reiterate that media have many benefits, but sometimes people perceive it in a wrong way
therefore
 media show inspiration shows.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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