The graph gives information about drinking habits of the US population by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about drinking habits of the US population by age.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar graph represents
percentage
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of usage ethanol
is
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divided into four subgroups; heavy
drinker
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drinkers
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, Light
drinker
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drinkers
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, ex-
drinker
and never
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drinkers
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by ages in the U.S. A glance at the graphs reveals that the younger
population
tends to alcoholism more than older people.
In addition
,
the
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almost half of
population
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never drinks
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all ages. It can be seen clearly that the
population
of 25-54 years old attend to more drinking than the rest of them. Usage of alcohol has been just over the %40 all
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ages
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. Particularly, the highest heavy
drinker
age is 45-54
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olds
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.
However
, after the age of fifty-five, the proportion of drinking habit was
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fall,
while
the number of never
drinker
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drinkers
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slightly decreases.
In contrast
, the
population
of ex-drinkers increase as
total
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trend of
never drinkers
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. In conclusion, the percentage of ethanol users
are
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decreasing
according to
growing age. But, a minority of the
population
prefers to drink ethanol one of which does not escape heavy
drinker
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in
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%5.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words drinker, population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Drinking habits
  • Population demographics
  • Age group/bracket
  • Alcohol consumption
  • Frequency of drinking
  • Heavy drinking
  • Moderate drinking
  • Teetotaler
  • Legal drinking age
  • Societal norms
  • Trends over time
  • Underage drinking
  • Alcohol abuse
  • Health implications
  • Statistical data
  • Comparative analysis
  • Bar chart/Line graph
  • Binge drinking
  • Responsibility in drinking
  • Age-specific patterns
  • Cross-generational comparison
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