Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters ( such as food, clothes, and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decision about matter that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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People have different views about whether children should have freedom to decide what they want to do with daily problems. While some people disagree with the idea of allowing offspring to make their own decisions, I believe that children should have liberty to do
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. On the one hand, there are clear ethical arguments against letting children make own choices.
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, children are too young to fully understand the consequences after each activity they do.
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, they may hurt themselves.
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, when two children have a big conflict, if adults do not stop it immediately, they might end up being injured.
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, children may grow up with selfish - just think for themselves.
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is mostly because they are let to do whatever they want,
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as eating all good dishes in the meal without thinking that their parents have nothing to eat.
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, I think that it is more beneficial for children to choose how to solve everyday matters.
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with, children allowed to do something under reasonable control are more creative than those under strict observation of parents.
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means that in the future they could tackle with difficulties easier due to various solutions they may give out.
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, the ability to make decisions is an essential skill to become a good leader. Nowadays, we have numerous options in doing one work and we have to choose the best one, so certainly freely decision-making at the early age could help us. In conclusion, I can understand why people might not want children to have own choices, but it seems to me that freedom in choosing what they do need to be encouraged.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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