The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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The chart illustrates electricity
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and
production
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in the top ten highest
countries
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in 2014. It is clear from the chart that all
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, with the exception of Germany, produce marginally more than they consume. The two top
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, the United States and particularly China, were strong outliers
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the remaining
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had similar numbers and lagged far behind in both
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and
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. China produced and consumed the most, at 5,398 billion and 5,322
kWh
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, respectively. The
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nearest country in terms of both statistics was the US, where residents consumed 3,866 kilowatts an hour and produced slightly more at 4,099. Russian lead the rest of the nations with 1,057 (in
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) and 1,038
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(expenditure) followed by Japan (936.2 for
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and 856.7
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for
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). India and Canada ranked 5th and 6th with India producing 871
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and consuming 698.8
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Canada was slightly lower in both (618.9 and 499.9
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). In the 7th and 8th spots were France (producing 561.2
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and consuming 462.9) and Brazil, which recorded numbers
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530.7 and 455.8 for
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and
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, respectively. In the final two positions were Germany and the Republic of Korea with Germany having higher
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Korea (526.6 to 485.1
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)
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consumption
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(582.5
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compared with 449.5).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, production, countries, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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