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Many products that we buy are made in other countries.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion

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Many people have the opportunity to buy from other countries' products.
This
 essay will suggest the benefits and drawbacks of buying products from developed cities. Let's begin by looking advantages.One of the main benefits is that it can supply with different products to local supermarkets because not all countries have some resources.
However
 developed country
such
 as China will deliver as required.Some products we need on a daily life and we cannot imagine without including techniques and foods Another advantage is the communication between cities dramatically evolve.The international business better that local.It helps to keep the relationship in balance and it is important in the country's economy. The serious disadvantage is that the unemployment rate in society and
this
 leads to reduce in production in the local factory and
also
 cause it to fail business of people. Another disadvantage is that we cannot return the damage and poor quality products easily.It can negatively affect to the economy.
This
 leads us to take risk
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